final draft:
Rosie Lopez
Professor Wingate
English 114B
March 20th, 2013.
Painting an Image
The world revolves around space. Individuals set personal boundaries of space and do not like it when another individual
interrupts this boundary: however, space is not always determined by a specific location, and with the help of project space, I now
know space provides the writer with the opportunity to include detail in their writing. I have come to learn that academic writing;
especially descriptive writing relies on space to paint an image for the reader. Painting an image for the reader gets your point
across in a unique and alternative perspective, intriguing the reader to continue reading.
Descriptive writing within a space is describing a scene, whether from a movie, video, or place in complete detail. However,
I have learned to avoid unnecessary details. The key to descriptive writing is to paint an image for the reader without the reader
having any knowledge of that scene without unnecessary details. The space provided by the scene enhances the writing because
the reader becomes engaged in the reading. The reading assignments from the Growing Up Ethnic in America also helped in
improving my descriptive wring. This is because I realized that including a bit more detail in my writing makes a difference from
dullness to intriguing.
In addition, project space revolved around the idea of using space in academic writing, from blogs and descriptive writing
to social norm rebellion. Space is extremely important within academic writing, without space, types of writing such as descriptive
writing would not be possible. Space provides a visual or mental image allowing the writer to include an abundance of detail in
their writing. This way the writer in capable of incorporating details such as examples. These examples tend to be situations, such
as scenery or video scenes that have emerged. With the help of these scenery details the writer is capable of intriguing the reader
to continue reading. Also, by including details in writing, the writer is able to better explain his idea. Details also enhances a
student’s writing because the student is capable of “painting a picture” for the reader. Painting a picture for the reader gets the
reader intrigued and the reader is pulled into the writing.
Finally, individuals have created a “space bubble” to protect themselves from feeling uncomfortable. If another individual
invades this “space bubble” the person is displeased. Individuals do not only accommodate this with their personal space, but to
their property as well. Society has created a territorialism environment giving the people the need to have their space. Invading
this space usually results in a negative reaction from the individual toward the infiltrator. For example in English 114B, we were
put into groups to create a rationale and do it. Our rationale was to take an item from a person’s shopping cart and tape their
reaction. We described the reason we were doing this as well. We expected that the individuals would feel uncomfortable and our
hypothesis was correct. Customers felt uncomfortable and responded with profanity. I used the space I chose for my rationale and
project to write the description of my video.
In conclusion, space creates the opportunity for writers to be detailed in their writing. Including detail in writing creates an
image for the reader, captivating them and intriguing the reader to continue reading. However, including a detailed descriptions in
writing does not mean that the writer should include unnecessary details, they should be brief but on point to get their point
across. Unnecessary details results in a long and unattractive essay that the reader does not want to continue reading.
Word Count: 606
Professor Wingate
English 114B
March 20th, 2013.
Painting an Image
The world revolves around space. Individuals set personal boundaries of space and do not like it when another individual
interrupts this boundary: however, space is not always determined by a specific location, and with the help of project space, I now
know space provides the writer with the opportunity to include detail in their writing. I have come to learn that academic writing;
especially descriptive writing relies on space to paint an image for the reader. Painting an image for the reader gets your point
across in a unique and alternative perspective, intriguing the reader to continue reading.
Descriptive writing within a space is describing a scene, whether from a movie, video, or place in complete detail. However,
I have learned to avoid unnecessary details. The key to descriptive writing is to paint an image for the reader without the reader
having any knowledge of that scene without unnecessary details. The space provided by the scene enhances the writing because
the reader becomes engaged in the reading. The reading assignments from the Growing Up Ethnic in America also helped in
improving my descriptive wring. This is because I realized that including a bit more detail in my writing makes a difference from
dullness to intriguing.
In addition, project space revolved around the idea of using space in academic writing, from blogs and descriptive writing
to social norm rebellion. Space is extremely important within academic writing, without space, types of writing such as descriptive
writing would not be possible. Space provides a visual or mental image allowing the writer to include an abundance of detail in
their writing. This way the writer in capable of incorporating details such as examples. These examples tend to be situations, such
as scenery or video scenes that have emerged. With the help of these scenery details the writer is capable of intriguing the reader
to continue reading. Also, by including details in writing, the writer is able to better explain his idea. Details also enhances a
student’s writing because the student is capable of “painting a picture” for the reader. Painting a picture for the reader gets the
reader intrigued and the reader is pulled into the writing.
Finally, individuals have created a “space bubble” to protect themselves from feeling uncomfortable. If another individual
invades this “space bubble” the person is displeased. Individuals do not only accommodate this with their personal space, but to
their property as well. Society has created a territorialism environment giving the people the need to have their space. Invading
this space usually results in a negative reaction from the individual toward the infiltrator. For example in English 114B, we were
put into groups to create a rationale and do it. Our rationale was to take an item from a person’s shopping cart and tape their
reaction. We described the reason we were doing this as well. We expected that the individuals would feel uncomfortable and our
hypothesis was correct. Customers felt uncomfortable and responded with profanity. I used the space I chose for my rationale and
project to write the description of my video.
In conclusion, space creates the opportunity for writers to be detailed in their writing. Including detail in writing creates an
image for the reader, captivating them and intriguing the reader to continue reading. However, including a detailed descriptions in
writing does not mean that the writer should include unnecessary details, they should be brief but on point to get their point
across. Unnecessary details results in a long and unattractive essay that the reader does not want to continue reading.
Word Count: 606
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Project Space Draft:
My first project space essay draft is located on my "Rosie's 114 Blog" tab. The reason why my project space essay
draft is located in my blog is simple, comments! Since my essay is located in my blog, it provides my peers with the
opportunity to leave a comment about my essay. My peer's comments could help me improve my essay
because I could take into consideration their comments and feedback.
The link to my blog is provided down below.
draft is located in my blog is simple, comments! Since my essay is located in my blog, it provides my peers with the
opportunity to leave a comment about my essay. My peer's comments could help me improve my essay
because I could take into consideration their comments and feedback.
The link to my blog is provided down below.
Project Space Poem:
Project space revolved around the entity of space. The word "space' is universal!
It can vary from a specific location to even an emotional connection. For project space, a poem was
assigned to us; however, it is ot located in this tab. The project space poem is
located in the "Poem & Manifesto" tab.The link to my poem is located below.
It can vary from a specific location to even an emotional connection. For project space, a poem was
assigned to us; however, it is ot located in this tab. The project space poem is
located in the "Poem & Manifesto" tab.The link to my poem is located below.